Tennyson put it this way:
I hold it true, whate’er befall;
I feel it, when I sorrow most;
‘Tis better to have loved and lost
Than never to have loved at all.
I’m reading this and thinkin
That Lordy T – he wasn’t!!!:
So Lordy Listen here-
gonna give it to you straight
gotta hear me from the start
dat Lord poet guy
I do not
share his art
*
I felt it when you left
a piercing to my heart
I shoulda
thought it through
known betta at the start
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ya made your way
in a lost and lonely heart
now I’m brokin in pain
sumpins ‘truding
like a dart
**
Lordy dey is quotin ya
takin words a part
listen fool –
“ya must break away
wit out a brokin heart”
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Thanks to Lincolnian for the photo
***http://www.flickr.com/photos/lincolnian/107766522/
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that was simply beautiful dear, as I say your far better xxx
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Different from any of your previous posts, Leslie. The ending is very clever with puns in dialect. Great how that “sharing art” line fits the poem. Very cool use of language and meaning.
Cheers
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Thanks brudda
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Love it! Sometimes, sayin it like is, yo, is true poetry of da heart.
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patti – you make me smile
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ha. love your street lingo moon! now i cant get the song out of my head…happy oneshot!
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Thanks Bri – got that boom box raring to go
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this was fantastic!
though i would agree with Lord Tennyson: better loved and lost like never have loved at all
but of course as well – i hate broken hearts…
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I hate broken hearts too!!!!
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thanks for all your sweet encouragement
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I feel the blues acalling me. Interesting response to Tennyson. I have posted two poems this week. On not saying hello is new but Kingpin Baby was posted up on a quiet Sunday so I thought I’d give it another outing. Both are adaption of different formal poetry forms – pantoum and sonnet.
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Do you hear that????? Thanks for being part of One Shot again
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wow, great rap – you make Tennyson proud – he will wish he was alive in our time…nice..bkm
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ya think – don’t know probably would shake his head in disgust of “kids today”
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Hi moonie..a completely different style more like a rap..the short lines punched the verse..i liked it..cheers Pete
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Awesome accent! That made me smile inside. 🙂
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DJ RAPPA L MOON…
You go girl!!!!!
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Gangsta baby!!!
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wow..that poem has a great Rhythm! it got me with the words..i felt its tunes,spectacular Moon! Inspiring poem..:)))
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glad people got the rhythm it coulda flopped
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can’t help putting a beat to it. I’m rapping it in my head.
i just realized I can’t rap.
this was great fun! 🙂
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would be kinda fun to have someone put this to rap for my site
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Funny thing is, I can totally see Ella Fitzgerald singing this one. It feels like her voice, you know? I love it! 🙂
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Cool – me too
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I admire your guts in taking on the colloquial.
I’ve never been much for Tennyson or his crowd–just not my kind of poetry. He’s probably turning in his grave now.
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I don’t know it’s guts or stupidity
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poor Lordy T
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I was just thinking that for some reason my brain was fried and I needed to stop reading poems for the day…so told myself just one more poem and it was yours…so glad that it was the last thing I read today…it had me smiling and thinking this is why I love to read other writings…Thanks Leslie…you made my evening. 😉
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some how I see you holding a drink watching the sunset – wit a smile on dat face
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Wow, loved that way you pulled that together! Ain’t love grand? I decided to try the One Stop Poetry this week. I had been afraid to give it a shot. I hadn’t read the rules and I was thinking I would have to visit 18 like on Jingles’ which becomes so time consuming. Any way, liked this poem, very creative.
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It’s a rap counterpoint to Tennyson! Cool!
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ya got that right – thanks Glynn
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Love that is painful is love that was real. Broken hearts, a common ailment.
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That is so true in any language
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What a great update to that old sentiment.
My one shot is up here: http://razzamadazzle.wordpress.com/2010/08/10/my-old-woman/
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sometimes ya gotta do an update to get some smiles
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thanks for joining us at One Shot
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This was a joy to read. I read earlier when I recieved in email….had to finish my writing and imagery! 😉 Way to go on this one, a great “rapping” blend highlighting a writing, and the sort of, “you don’t know anythingggggg” kick. Excellent, heartaches are awful……ohhhh yes I know it too well as so many of us. (still trying to maintain my wounds) Very very well done Leslie!!! :)) It also has me thinking on historical realms……..hmmmm now there a thought….lol… *HUGS xoxox dear friend ~April
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April – I think if you and I were let loose together there would be T_R_O_U_B_L_E
Love L
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Very clever and stylish. I love poems about poets and how one feels about them at particular times. It is a kind of homage while saying something brilliantly new and original. I enjoyed this very much.
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I’m thinking of working up some other classics – promise I will spare you the rap
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1. Loved this style and the lingo… so unlike you, Moonie 🙂
2. Absolutely fell in love with your take on the subject! hehehe
Nice way to roll in for the One Shot!!!
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you know the moon – she changes with the seasons
smiles
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Great message in this, and I love the RAP feel.
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Anthony yu is the bomb!!!
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Wrap around Lord T!
Great rhythm
Love it – do you perfrom if so where. If you don’t you should 🙂
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no I don’t perform – used to sing in a band tho (no rappin)
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ha! I loved this
a truly fun poem
talent, moon
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Thanks Ms. Suz – it was fun “fo shur”
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Well now that’s a very different sort of poem. Interestingly done. Putting up some nice counters there to the old lord. Good beat (not that I should ever attempt to rap), with some nice puns and language use in general. Well played, Madame Moon!
Or, rather: Word, yo.
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Fo shizzle – C!!!
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I love a good homage poem and this is a great one! Very nice OSW post this week
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SMG – TY Dude!!!
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Really liked the rhythm. It had me tapping my toes and feeling bad for the broken-hearted.
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Talon you make me smile
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The voice of your poem is raw, honest, and confident. I love it!
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thanks for catching that I was in a “not into Tennyson” mood
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It made me smile with delight, had a nice beat to it , a special poem indeed.
Joanny
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Thanks Joanny – glad you could catch the beat – that’s the hard part – fo shizzle
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That’s quite a rap to Tenny. Way to change it up.
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And that’s a wrap!!!
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That was different from your normal style and made me want to dance….loved it Leslie….let’s rap!! You are sooooo clever!! Hugs xxx
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Bravi! Great rhythm here. Fantastic modern response to a classic.
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Thanks kinda liked the change up
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Leslie,
I’m just sayin” if you hear someone rapping it….you know they found it here. Love your wit! that was great
I was just thinking the other day how cool it would be if they turned some famous poem into an updated rap song..last time they did it, it was disco and from Romeo and Juliet..it was the only way I could memorize the opening lines was to sing along to the disco song
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Thanks patty – needed some fun
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It’s the lost part of the loving that is the killer! I hear what you are saying…love the lingo! How DO we mend a broken heart? Heartspell
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Yeah broken hearts are difficult to put back together
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Leslie..nice one…liked the carefree lingo there 🙂
suja
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this one was fun to do
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Clever poetry Leslie…was subconsciously rapping to it…lols…great new style!
love this
“ya must break away
wit out a brokin heart”
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We need a rapping section in blogdom
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So cool! Jiven’ up the classics– nicely done!
http://mairmusic.wordpress.com/
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gotta get someone to do that up right for me
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Way to tell that old Lordy dude, girl! Actually, he is one of my very favorite poets, but I love the way you contrasted the vernacular with his elegant phrasing. I liked this.
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I like him too – but somedays enough of the old. LOL
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