Look at me a tragic flaw
assembled by nature
as a blemish
an embarrassment
surely not meant to embrace
rather shun
***
you don’t know me
you say you do
but you don’t
not really
who does?
no one!
*
Take a closer look
look into nothing
For that is what I am
my heart an abysmal void
a web darkly spun
*
I live life alone
on my own terms
sample what you like
there is nothing worth having
better escape, quickly, run!
*
This is my curse
a world of loveless, nothingness
drawn into dark
away from the light of hope
don’t bother there is no sun
*
But then
it is what they wanted
chosen and delivered to me
an anomaly
a freak
being no one
***
*
Here’s to another week of One Shot Wednesdays.
I was looking back over my notes and emails in May and June when we were throwing ideas around about One Shot Poetry. Its been a great year for One Stop Poetry – thanks for your support.
Thanks to Creative Commons and Sarah for the photograph : http://www.flickr.com/photos/dm-set/4144947061/
penned in moon dust 
….See you on The Darkside of the Moon.
Nice foray into the abyss of hopelessness.
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Oh, so sad. A not so sweet surrender…
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Wondefully dark, Leslie. Powerfully heart breaking.
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I don’t believe anyone is a no one, although I know people can feel they are.
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No one should feel that way but sadly I think life can pull them that way
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Whoaaa… a daaaark one, Moonie! But so well composed.. It was like being let in on some deep secret… a scary invitation maybe…
Really well written! Me loves dark poetry!
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Kavita – you are such a darling. Not my genre to be sure
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great shot at dark poetry moon! this gets 2 thumbs up from me! a creepy look into a “freak” of society… well done. and another thing I like is that some people can relate to it as well… nice
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Great poem, works well with your ‘dark’ theme! I love how it flows 🙂
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well I was aiming at dark – next up Romance…
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A disturbing look at someone with poor self image and doesn’t see the value of inner beauty. Well written poem and emotionally stirring.
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Justin – thanks so for your comment always means alot
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Such a dark place to be, to feel one is nothing. I really like the way this is expressed, nicely done Leslie.
Anita.
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Thanks Anita – it is sad that so many live here
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ugh i know many a kid that feels just this way…alone in the world and sinking fast…
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But she looks kind of cute to me. (Kind of like Joanie Mitchell in an alcohol and cigarette haze!)
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It’s heartbreaking that there are those who really do feel this way. If only they knew that we are all tragically flawed in one way or another and that the heart is meant to be full.
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Oh, that is so sad. I want to comfort whoever’s thought that represents.
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I think it represents many who gasp for the air of life and hope
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this reminds me of what i thought of myself during my teen years…
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many did and do – sadly
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I think you captured what a lot of children “learn” from parents, teachers, schoolmates, and the world around them. Home should wrap every child in love but the sadness of our history is that it hasn’t but has sent them too early to work, to fight, to survive thinking themselves freaks and unfits. Good capture here, Leslie.
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I think I’ll stay on the high side of the water mark as the low side is a little LOW
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Ouch! this is really dark. Not a nightmare, but the reality of so many of us. It speaks well to that absymal void.
And pretty damn universal to think of it. Excellent voice.
Lady Nyo
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Thanks Jane – yes I have to admit it scared me a bit to write it.
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all at once i’m comforted and unsettled that these words resound so clearly with me. this is not how i feel on all days, but your work represents a darkness i know all too well.
really well done.
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Big hugs for those days
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I love dark poetry and you composed this so beautifully. Made my day! 🙂
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my heart an abysmal void
a web darkly spun.
I like this. I could relate to this during
dark time in my life. Thankfully,long again ago. Enjoyed the it
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Think I have hit several who have all been there – too bad we didnt know each other – maybe…
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A web darkly spun, indeed! Marvelous, Leslie!
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This poem made me think of my sister who has battled addiction, mental illness, and alcoholism all of her adult life…what must often cross her mind…her isolation.
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this reminds me of Dickinson’s piece I’m nobody, who are you 🙂
We are all nobodies to somebody lol
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hmm hopefully more of a somebody…
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Dark and heartbreaking- nice!
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yes hers is isn’t it?
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Yes…this is dark…and somewhat sad.
Re-reading this reminds me of The Elephant Man and the isolation he felt.
Nicely done, Leslie.
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‘an anomaly
a freak
being no one’
So very dark and sad. To have such little hope and such low self-esteem and poor self-image. I cannot imagine what brings someone to this place, and yet I have seen people that view themselves this way. A very thought-provoking piece.
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A stirring piece, rustling into dark, a void of nothingness… nicely penned.
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This is so hollow and uncomfortable that I want to look away…
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Dark, sad and so powerful. An excellent write.
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Dark indeed but not sinister, instead, in your deft hand, you made it malleable with feelings! Great work, Leslie!
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There is an air of resignation to the darkness in your poem, as though fighting the loneliness and despair is futile and the sense of acceptance is complete. I like that it isn’t sorrowful or self-pitying. I enjoyed it.
Beth
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An amazing squelchy wade through the muck of inner darkness!
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You meet the standards of dark indeed here. You crafted your words with such a sharp line in tone, they were biting to go through. Great write ~ Rose
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Thanks definitely not my usual fare to be sure
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Years ago, I wrote a poem called absolute aloneness. i know this feeling that you have described so well here, a feeling that is universal, but also frightening. great job with this.
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Whoa! Moonie..everyone has a dark side, huh? Bravo! a great read…I look at you a little differently now. Not in a bad way..just differently.
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Definitely an uncharacteristic piece for you, mdw, but very effective and empathetic. You’ve painted a bleak but accurate portrait here.
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now this was really written on the dark side of the moon and i certainly wished there was more light in the world because far too many people feel like this
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I like dark…
facade
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You know I always think there’s beauty in everything. Even ugly has its own kind of beautiful. Your prose is sad and dark but, conveys that thought very well.
Everyone thought the Elephant man was so ugly and hideous. I thought him scared and so afraid of everyone because they would all hurt him if they had the chance.
I read a page the other day that some young teens had killed a creature that came crawling out of a cave towards them, and because it was hidious to look at and it scared them, they beat it to death. The powers that be ‘think’ it was a sloth that had lost all of its hair. The photos of it did look awful, it looked half human, half beast, weird to say the least but, it didn’t deserve to die just because they didn’t like its looks or they were scared of it. Why do we humans feel such a need to destroy that which we don’t understand?
Hmmm…see what your prose sparked off in me..LOL shows it was well written and, thought provoking just as all good words are meant to be!
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Sadly, I can totally relate to this, although I don’t feel like I live alone on my own terms, but on someone else’s for the most part. It really spoke to me, and in some ways, was comforting. When you feel alone, you think you’re the only one who feels that way. Clearly it is not the case. Thanks, or I guess, sorry.
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Loved it
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Oh what a terrible place to be! Your words brought that place alive brilliantly!
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Very nice. I always seem to relate well to poems that deal with a dark or shaded nature, not a testament or anything, just saying. Again very nice. The art was a proper touch. Gripping.
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You’ve done a really nice job of conveying that hopelessness, helplessness of the abyss that anyone can fall into to become “no one”. Excellent “dark” one shot ~
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Blemishes? Beauty? Pretty much the same? 😉
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Fantastic! You nailed that raw emotion.
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Yep, darker than the dark side of the moon!
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It seems you released some built up emotion. The piece flowed well. good one
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First thought was Phantom of the Opera. This poem evokes the tragic antihero archetype quite well. Excellent work! 😀
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Wow Leslie! Beautifully Dark write! I knew if you searched you would find it. You did not only find it you expressed it so well!! Great Write Leslie!
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