The Narrow Road #haiku #napowrimo

Where do you go on the narrow road? To another land where you have never gone? Only the story teller knows…


bridge

There’s a narrow road

you can see it if you try

look very closely

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look very closely

for the almost hidden way

peer beyond the trees

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peer beyond the trees

 imagination unfolds

a story is told

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a story is told

worlds and cultures far and near

 centuries old

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centuries old

aged hands move yellowed page

story of the road

The prompt for today at Carpe Diem  is the Story Teller. My story is inspired by Kristjaan and Basho both who have written about “The Narrow Road”

Author: moondustwriter

Thank you for visiting Moondustwriter. One of the many exciting things I've had the honor of doing is writing and publishing in multiple genres (including education) in E. African for E. Africa. As a writer, it is a thrill to write for children (on all continents) who want to learn. I've been part of the blogging community for more than 13 years. Some old timers may remember the award winning (2011 Twitter Shorty ) blog community - One Stop Poetry. I was the co-producer of that fast growing blog community. I am a published writer, poet, artist and photographer. I have written, as well as edited, for periodicals, radio, blogs and fellow writers. There are many facets to this moon - my joy is in meeting you!

15 thoughts on “The Narrow Road #haiku #napowrimo”

  1. Sharon, my sympathies on your mucsle spasms. Hope that you are getting around a little better now.I so enjoy your haibun. The mix of prose and poetry works so well. You set the scene in prose, then offer poetic punctuation, or a new color in verse. On your first haiku, you might be able to cut steep and autumn. When I read rocky cliffs, I see steep cliffs. And when I read gold and red leaves, I know the season.Traditionalists in the haiku form say that the best haiku contain only one seasonal reference. I don’t make that a strict rule in my own poetry, but I do find that one seasonal reference is usually all it takes, and then I have more space to work with in the poem.On your second haiku, I’ll make a comment that has to do with my own taste, and you can take it or leave it. I like the first line very much, but have problems with the personification in the rest of the poem. I wonder if the second half of the poem could consist entirely of water dripping from the trees, without directly linking it to either tears or man’s carelessness? In a haiku, I’d rather evoke the feeling than state it directly.

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    1. 21 April 2009 – 6:27 pm I love this:Here’s mine: Focus on people Reduce waste from start to end Profit will comeSome guy on a liekndIn board once asked people to write 6-word summaries of their resumes. Got some interesting results with that one too.

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