This grey dismal scene
embossed my mind
long forgotten memories
path of my past
icicles dripped dark lies
“failure, fool, worthless”
mud sucked boots
clothes would never dry
and the sky, the sky
spoke the words
“there is no sun
it’s been removed”
only darkness looms
etching finality on your tomb”
no places to dream
those were taken away too
go ahead and scream, and scream
no one will hear you
here I stood
holding my hand
the one that couldn’t remember
tried so hard to forget
we stood together
at the past’s path again
Here’s to a New Year for Friday Fictioneers. Enjoy the work submitted by fantastic writers and poets.
22 thoughts on “Ice cold memories #flashfiction #poetry”
Did you feel the icy drip???
Thanks I always appreciate your visit
Although it sounds sad,I like it.
Thanks, the poem drove itself into sad, greyness
Well, I don’ t do Goodreads or LibraryThing, so I can’t say anything there. On Amazon it’s space opera , I guess there’s eight or so kyoderws I remember being checked. But if you take all the kyoderws on there, NONE of them even *begin* to match the non-ambiguity and clarity of Harry Potter , Stargate , Babylon 5 , etc. This is the problem. Space Opera means one thing to me, and another to you, and another to someone else; I’ve had people classify RAH’s stuff as mostly space opera when that simply doesn’t fit my definition at all. Looking for space opera, upbeat, family-friendly ? There’s someone out there that’s classified Urutsukudouji as family-friendly , probably.By contrast, there is absolutely no argument about fanfic labeled Harry Potter , in terms of what the label’s trying to get across. Whether it’s GOOD or not doesn’t matter you’ve already eliminated 9,999 out of 10,000 competing stories in a single stroke.I did a project on fiction classification as one of my final requirements in one of my college classes, and I thought I’d come up with a brilliant way of categorizing SF/F works so as to be able to at least partially automate the search. My professor demolished it in two seconds, though with the kind observation that it was a better try than he’d seen before.To be able to do the same thing for non-Fanfic as for fanfic, we need to find descriptive words or phrases that are just as universal in understanding as Babylon 5 Fic is to the fic world, and I’m really not sure it’s possible.
I love this poem … for mud sucked boots… for the one that could’nt remember… re-reading thank you
Thanks for the visit and the re-read.
It is sad but I enjoyed reading it. Really was interesting. Thanks, Nan
I guess cold memories tend to be sad
and thanks soooooo
The initial image and verse engages you right from the start.
Thanks the image really was a perfect prompt!
I don’t know but I thought of Wuthering Heights when I saw this photo and read the words. Haunting!
Hmm wandering the foggy moors??? I like it…
Thanks for your visit girl from the sweet side of the moon
Love the embossing and the engraving. Very effective, all in all! 🙂
A cold path – to be sure!
Welcome back. 🙂
icicles dripped dark lies…my favorite line. For some reason this put me in mind of The Raven by the Master of Darkness, Poe. Well done.
If that drawing is yours, you’re so multi-talented. So much in your words, a dystopian future, and a wounded past. Great images. Ron
Really eerie, and some great word choices.. (I love icicle as a word.. though nowhere near my bed)…
Perfect. Takes me back to my own moments of pain and loneliness, the kind of hellhole I had thought there was no way out of.
After previous smssibuion of comment titles/ quotes between were automatically deleted! They have been restored in the following text:Greetings from London town.Evergreen No. 97 (volume 17) was published in 1973, is in newspaper format and looks like a poor relation of the very early Andy Warhol’s Interview magazine with all b & w printing. It’s a Special Closeup wholly devoted to the film Last Tango in Paris. No WSB! Articles by Norman Mailer, Alberto Moravia, Nat Hentoff, Parker Tyler, Dotson Rader, Iris Owens, Fernando Arrabal et al, interview with Bertolucci, stills from film. 32 pages, 16 inches x 11 1/2 inches and folded. Editor Barney Rosett/ Special editor Kent Carroll. As with issue no. 96, published quarterly by Evergreen Review Inc. East 11th Street New York, NY 10003 $1.50 per copy, $5.00 four issues, $9.00 eight issues. [Some hope, Buster.]I’m pretty certain there was no Evergreen no. 99.The Grove Press Number of The Review of Contemporary Literature Fall 1990 Vol X, No. 3 and The Art of Publishing II Barney Rosett interview by Ken Jordan in Paris Review Winter 1997-98 Number 145 have further insights into Evergreen’s history.Keep it coming, Jed.Best Wishes,Andrew