Can’t Last Forever #haiku #Fiction

seeking for relief
aching of a broken heart –
love isn ‘t forever

“Analyze that Haiku “#2 gives us the opportunity to look around the above haiku 360 degrees and tell its story so here goes:

It had been a long summer. Nights never cooled below 100 and my coffee ground skin was always in some state of pealing. You had loved caressing that skin once or had it just been a mirage. Had I made myself believe that you couldn’t catch a wave the same way without me, that the crisp mountain air was dull when we couldn’t chase the fall leaves, and winter nights together well you said they took your breath away. My heart peals back revealing layer after layer of pain. When will I get to the end of you and memories…? This desert heat is more constant than your love even it can’t last forever.

… and then write a haiku:

hot nights

your shoes wait at the door

cold memories

Thanks to Kristjann Panneman for the prompt and inspiration.

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10 thoughts on “Can’t Last Forever #haiku #Fiction”

Wow … Leslie what a great analysis of this haiku … very close to my original image … and your own haiku is so in touch with the sphere I have painted in my haiku. Chapeau!

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Oh…I do love that haiku…so much in so few lines.

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You have such a wonderful gift, thanks for sharing.

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Very nicely written and a good idea!

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Reading your haiku makes me ache inside — a feeling of love that was never quite equal on both sides, a doomed love, a love that raises so many painful questions — very well done.

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